Monday, March 26, 2007

short story - jason

Once upon a time, there was a boy who could fly. He liked to fly like no other, the birds couldn't enjoy life as much as he did. He would never show off and he never considered himself better than anyone because of his ability. One day, he met a girl who also could fly. He decided that he wanted to impress this girl. He showed off how fast he was and how high he could go. He bragged about how much better he was from everyone else. While he was doing all of this, a boy who could not fly started feeling jealous and envious. As the boy grew jealous, the flying boy started losing his flying ability. In mid-air, the boy fell to the ground and died instantly.

1 comment:

Dan Brownlee said...

This is a tad short. I know its a short story, but it is almost too short. However, it does work like that. It is short and to the point and frankly, exciting. The sentence structure is kind of primitive and repetitive, so I would suggest changing that up a bit. Other than that, it has a good purpose (and makes you think) so I think that it makes a good short story.