Section 1
I hate the way the media protrays african americans in a negative light, and am sometimes embrassed, because of the reactions from others. This has made me very defensive of all stereotypes. People don't understand the "real" effects of being poke at in a negative way. They don't go through the same things and usually have it much easier because of their race. People are always making and imitating how they believe an african american will act. It hurts to feel like your the lowest , when reality is that you do not believe this but sometimes are forced too. I feel like I'm trapped in this stereotype, forever.
Section 2
The trapping of my culture is not just in everyday interaction but also in San Diego citys. If you travel south of La Holla you will be driving into towns of poverty and minorities. In these areas we are trapped with liquor stores, taco shops, that are across from our churches. Billboards that promote drugs, and violence. Every fatting restuarant is extremely close and the gym is a state away. The students in our school think that it's a fashion show. This is was we are trapped into being. This is what causes outside viewers, along with the media, to believe all the misleading misceptions. And due to the upkeeping of the grass on the other side the media pretends that there lives are sinless. Because of our poverty scene the media never notices or publize the good, only the bad and we are still titled as nothing. Even though the supreme court passed the equal human rights law, there is still intentional segregation.
Section 3
I was born September 13, 1990, the second of three children. The oldest brother, Khalil, is hardly around because he lives in Indiana. My youngest sibling is very much similar to me which typically results in unneccessary quarrels that then causes my mom to yell and lecture on the importance of family. My mom is a great teacher and should of held up that profession after she split from my dad. My dad lives in Newark, New jersey and is a successful business man who we see quarterly. However, his love is still much respected.
Success is what you make of it, and education is the only way. One would get privaleges and rewards for A's and the perfect speech with proper english. However, you won't be knocked for a "b", jsut punished verbally. College was not an option, but the choice of major was.
Since we were younger we knew that the first thing to do when you got home was homework. At the elemnetray stages my mom even provided me with my own homework, which allowed us to stay on the honor roll those years. Until we were more mature,this is how we were brought up. Knowing and realizing that educaton comes first. Some philosphys with my dad were the same but a little bit more extreme. He taught on the values of being grateful. For $100.00 , I'd be ask to write an essay on why I want it and what I'm going to use it for.
Section 4
We'd waste hours of time trying to live what we thought was the perfect grown up life, through the interaction an dconversation of Barbie and Ken. That was years ago and know i forget the reason why we'd spend those numerous nights sitting on the floor walking around dolls. Was it for enjoyment, or just the idea that, thats what you want to be? Then there's still the split of black and white dolls , that are all skinny. Is this how we were trapped into believing what is cute or not? Black vs. White, and Fat vs. Skinny.
Section 5
The women that I remember was beautiful, intelligent, and extremely motivated. Always above the rest with astonishing vocabulary. To me she sat on a petastool and was for sure going to heaven. A women who enjoyed the beach coming from philadelphia, pennslvannia. She carried herself as professinal as possible and knew exactly where she stood as a afircan american woman with no mistakes.
Her love is still much respected but her attitude has changed. She is now a homeboy who is sometimes stressed and hates bills. She wants order in her house and is very bipolar. She has did things that I question her reasoning, and nevertheless this just makes me realize that she is just human.
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Part 1
HOC
This paragraph is very strong. You get all your points across.But remember that you do not want to get your readers think "wo is me". There are other poeple out there that kuve streotypes, but you have to be apart from everyone else. Demonstrate that you can make a change, and that you are not the average african american teen age girl.
LOC
"and am somtimes embrassed, because of the reactions from other" change to " and I' am sometimes embrassed, because of the reactions from others".
"People are always making and imitating how they believe an african american will act." to "People are always protraying how they believe an african american will act."
Part 2
HOC
I like the way you make your strong points and try for the reader to know what San Diego is all about if they do not live here. I can see the message you are trying to protray to the reader. You are very creative as well as original.
LOC
"The students in our school think that it's a fashion show".
I do not believe this setence is necessary.If you decide to keep it, then I suggest you elaborate.
Part 3
HOC
I like the way you express your feelings in this paragraph. I like the way that you choose this as a creative paragraph.
LOC
"College was not an option, but the choice of major was."
I think that you need to re phrase this setence.
Part 4
HOC
This is a really strong paragraph, but I believe you need a better way to phrase it. I understand what you are saying, but you need to make it more elaborated.
LOC
"We'd waste hours of time trying to live what we thought was the perfect grown up life, through the interaction an dconversation of Barbie and Ken. That was years ago and know i forget the reason."
you need to correct this setence or rephrase it.
Part 5
HOC
I also think that you need to rephrase this paragraph, and make them less wordy.
LOC
"Her love is still much respected but her attitude has changed."
CORRECT THIS
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