1. Writing is a form of expression. People write because they can, and because any person that understands the language and symbols written, can read their writing and understand it. The types of writings that I can think of are poems, reports, letters, scripts.
2. The one I choose is movie scrips or songs/poetry/rap. It would be cool if the class was divided into groups and we made horros/adventure/anything films. We would record and edit these movies of course. The other circled was the songs/poetry/rap. Writing and composing your own music is awesome, and it would be great if the class could do this. Both of these courses would be fun to learn and fun to present.
3. An autobiography is usually about your life. You input your truth and feelings into the biography when only necessary.
4. I do not like it when people look down on me for some things I have done in the past and have learned from them. My reputation.
5. I was born into a caring and wealthy family. My Mom’s side of the family and my Dad’s side are completely different. My moms side is very well off strict. They discuss things such as my future, money, or my grandpa’s trip around the moon in the Apollo 8. You get the picture. My Dad’s parents and family are more fun and outgoing, and discuss things such as my future, sports, mexico, and wine. Both sides of the family are very knolwdgabela and give good advice about almost anything, so I usually listen to them.
Since my parents were raised by two different kinds of family, they have different views on how a child or teenager should be raised. My Mom coming from a family of one younger sister and four old troublesome brothers, with very strict parents, feels punishment and strict rules is the best way to raise me (most of the time). My Dad believes in the same things as my mom, but is a bit more laid back. It is good to have a balance between the two.
6. Every Morning before school I would walk down to the end of the concrete field, stepping onto a different type of ground. A battleground. Well it was also grassy and muddy. Anyways this one large rectangular field was separated from the rest of the recess area, and for a good reason. The game we played there was dodge ball, or team ball.
All the cool and athletic kids would line up along the wall to get picked for a side. After the team captains took about an hour chossing their team mates, the game was on. This game was very extreme, and if you don’t know how to play dodgeball, the point of the game is to throw rubber balls across a divided field to eliminate the other team. The ball could bounce off the ground or wall and hit you, getting you out.
This would last until the bell rang. For some reason I never fround this game to be old. What was the point of playing this every day at school in the morning, and during lunch? Because it was a awesome game, that was why.
7. I had childhood memories of this kid named Evan Backer. Me and him were the goofiest kids in our grade, and were known to be in a group called “the three stooges”. Our other friend Jon was also a stooge, and we were always doing something different.
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- Good honesty, but expand on it, it should be a paragraph.
- Would be interesting to see where it goes
- What are some of the things you have done in the past?
L.O.C.
- It's too short. "My reputation." isn't really a sentence.
Part II.
H.O.C.
- Covers a wide range of topics, maybe you should try going in depth to one of the details.
- ALthough its long, there wasn't anything unique in there that kept my attention.
L.O.C.
- There's not too much sentence cohesion. Written word is different from spoken word, try not to make it so it sounds like you're talking.
- fix typo "knolwdgabela".
- Put more flow into your paragraph.
Part III.
H.O.C.
- Funny, but not really too deep.
- Describe the field more, paint the image for the reader.
L.O.C.
- Not too much sentence cohesion.
- Try to keep things chronological, don't add in random "Well it was also grassy and muddy."
- fix typo
Part IV.
H.O.C.
- ends abruptly, it's not really a story
- add to it, why did you tell us about your friends?
L.O.C.
- Fix small grammar mistakes
- Nothing too drastic to be changed
- Type chronologically